I liked the argument that the visualization is trying to make. The visualization could be clearer to highlight the spatial distribution of where exactly the new symbol being built will be placed and how it is located with respect to the census distribution along racial lines. For example could you make the map into an actual boundary map and show with contrasting colors the census distribution, and then insert the image in the middle? And what do you mean when you ask for who is this a comeback--is this something you can show visually as well? Instead of a juxtaposition, how about two maps--one of the racial distribution, and one which is an imaged map of Muskegon as envisioned by the "pure muskegon" people?
I like the graphic on the left side that says "Pollution Has No Borders." I'm not sure if your caption explains where exactly this part of the image comes from, but I think elaborating on that would make the image ethnographically stronger.
The caption hints that there are other scenes portrayed on the rest of the wall which would be interesting to see analyzed. And its ethnographic import might be enriched by a small biographical sketch, if any information is available, of the artist(s) responsible for this work.
They author may like to tell more about the place he took the photo: his reading of the murals, the built environment, etc.
The author notes that " I want to look more closely at these images as well as the methodologies that go into their construction to ask what forms of risk are made visible and what are made invisible." That would be really great, for example, if she can give a couple of more information about the methodology used for this interactive map, namely, digital elevation modelling. How does she interpret this methodology as an ethnographer?
I think this is a powerful image where the aesthetics and argument come together seamlessly, so I don't have any suggestions on how to enrich it.
The distance is really genius here, but I wonder if you could use blurring techniques to focus in on Wilma more or even the documents. Or if you could play a bit with the blank wall space off to the left. If the focus is on the sort of lone wolf approach to this archive maybe highlighting WIlma more could be useful too. This juxtaposed with a photo from Wilma’s perspective could be interesting too. Not sure what it would look like, but it would be interesting to see her perspective of the documents.
I think that the image itself is powerful and does invoke an understanding of air polution and its effects.
The composition is nicely achieved, however, it would be helpful to have the date of the Census data in it.