This visualization speaks to notions of how alcoholism renders a society toxic by extension of disciplinary regimes that conflate masculinity with violence.
I would implore you to include feminist and queer perspectives and artwork for a broader understanding of how (hyper)masculinity is constructed, challenged, and negotiated in Urban Guatemala. A visualization of the bus routes could further enrich your ethnography too.
Personally, I like the integration of comical humor in the form of illustration when addressing "gruesome" or difficult matters. The analogy visualized in the progression images between [re]productivity and alcoholism raises a critical question on the heteronormative message implied. It makes me think of the rhetoric used by Progressives in the late-nineteenth-century pertaining to alcoholism, violence, and diminishing productivity in the United States, culminating in the Volstead Act of 1919 which ushered the Prohibition Era.
I might want to revisit Balas y Bolos. Unfortunately, Google translate is not without error but for a Non-Spanish speaker, it translated to "bullets and bowling."
The sentiment I get from the critical commentary and the essay is the alcoholism in Urban Guatemala is causal for endemic aberrations and an impediment to societal progression. I would caution against overarching force-causing claims by perhaps endorsing a "formation stories" approach elaborated by historical sociologists Daniel Hirschman and Ariail Reed. For example, how does postcolonialism, queer assemblages, and neoliberalism intersect with violence and alcoholism in Urban Guatemala?