This caption sets the stage for what promises to be an interesting journey, and the photograph has some intriguing elements--having read the description for the photo essay as a whole, I found myself squinting to see if the white debris scattered on the ground is organic or manmade. That said, I would have appreciated more of an effort to thematize the picture so as to tie together its various elements or make the most important ones especially salient in the mind of the reader. I would also have liked more explanation, rather than merely description, of what the picture shows--why are the men harvesting sand, for example?
While the caption presents the case quite clearly. The idea that this "clean" city is actually toxic for some of its residents is implicit, but the notion has the potential for a more nuanced discussion using the terminology of toxicity.
The caption succeeds to guide the reader from the moment the image was taken beyond the fishermen's activities we can see. What we see and don't see is also what the caption hones in on -- suggesting that the viewers imagine what is left of a place after it has 'become toxic'. The caption could maybe give more context about the powerplant -- who operates it, what is the significance for local economies, etc.
It was unclear to me the meaning of each number on the petrochemical sites, also I was wondering which of those is your fieldsite.
I would to see elaborations in the captions of all three images, albeit in different ways. Images 1 and 2: what are the places? What are their histories? Where did you find them in the archive? (Same goes for the images of Biddy Mason, which seem to be different photographs of her.) Image 3: where is this archive? What is your relationship with it?
I might want to revisit Balas y Bolos. Unfortunately, Google translate is not without error but for a Non-Spanish speaker, it translated to "bullets and bowling."
It may be useful to rethink the mapping less an outcome of environmental injustice on social communities but rather as a starting point to expand our theoretical understandings of "racialization." For example, how might this map provide an empirical example of what constitutes a "racial project?" Conversely, how might it serve as an emancipatory tool for political action?
The caption is elaborate enough and perfectly balances the ethnographic visualization and theorization of the phenomena.
I would suggest that the caption could be extended to maybe include some of the census data in terms of the total population and also different population groups, and perhaps more ethnographic details such as experiences of residents in different parts of the town, or different ways in which people express their views related to the sculpture. How was it received and how is it viewed now by residents of different parts of the city?