Can you suggest ways to elaborate the caption of this visualization to extend its ethnographic message?

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Ben Pauli's picture
March 1, 2020
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This caption sets the stage for what promises to be an interesting journey, and the photograph has some intriguing elements--having read the description for the photo essay as a whole, I found myself squinting to see if the white debris scattered on the ground is organic or manmade. That said, I would have appreciated more of an effort to thematize the picture so as to tie together its various elements or make the most important ones especially salient in the mind of the reader. I would also have liked more explanation, rather than merely description, of what the picture shows--why are the men harvesting sand, for example?

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Louise Elstow's picture
February 26, 2020
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  • I enjoyed the introduction text for the essay as a whole.  I wonder if part of the essay introduction needed to be included here with the first photo to provide more context? 
  • What were you on your way to do in the mangroves? You call it a Mangrove Collection Trip - but what does that mean?  What were you collecting?   And - who is Dr Mar? What is he a doctor of?  What is he working on?  Why is he there?  What is he using the trip for?
  • You mention ‘the biannual local science conference in 2016’ - local to where?  Where was it hosted?  Also - why ‘the’ conference and not ‘a’ conference?
  • I particularly enjoyed the use of the word littoral in the introduction to the essay - because it is almost being a pun on the word ‘litter’ which you subsequently found.   It is literally littoral litter.
  • Also - I am stuck by the idea of liminality here in the photo of the beach and in the wider project on mangroves - the scene in the photo is not mangrove and not the sea, it is the beach. Indeed, the mangrove is not only on the edge - it is the edge - sometimes in the saline world, sometimes in the fresh-water world.    Is there anything in terms of boundary objects (Star and Griesmeyer) which could be helpful? 
  • Is there another word for verdant you could consider, as you use it twice in quick succession.  The same for bumpy.  And why did you mention the rainy season?  Has it contributed to the lush greenery or bumpiness?
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